Portfolio

I think that my portfolio is overall pretty decent and complete although I need to do some organization of papers and drafts including our second paper. The first and third papers are the best ones I wrote and if I could only put those in the portfolio I would. I think that the revised papers are much better than the first ones I wrote because I go a chance to review them and make them much better. I also figured out different techniques on how to make the projects better from one to another because what I learned from the last one.
I will revise all the copies to the best I can and further the information, sources and strength of the paper to make it the best it can possibly be. I think having more than one revised peice is good to have because it shows that I actually took the time to look at the papers and review them to make them better. That is my plan to finalize my portfolio.

Letter to Visual

                                                                                                               Dalton Schutjer

                                                                                                               1500 Morton Ave

                                                                                                               Des Moines, IA 50316

                                                                                                               April 6, 2011

Dear Dr. Cottrill,

            Violence in video games is teaching young teens to act out. The video clearly shows that after playing a violent video game such as Call of Duty, a teen acts out in his rage after playing the game. It shows what can happen and what could happen when teens, young and old, play a violent video game and how their reaction to the game could affect them.

            Through the video I think the viewers can get a better understanding of how the affects of violent video games affect the player of the game. When writing about the violence the reader has to create their own picture and imagine what could happen. But, the video give the reader/watcher a picture and visual of what happens after playing the game. It provides them with the outcome they can see instead of having to imagine.

            I choose to play Call of Duty because it is a first-person shooter game and that was considered by ERSB (Entertainment Rating System) the most enticing game that teens are affected by and freak out at the end of the game because I got killed. I then went to the gas station and stole a car at gun point because of my anger after playing the game. The actions in the video are backing up my argument that violent video games are causing violent teens because of my reactions after playing the game.

            I think that by doing a visual essay and making my argument for everyone to see will help my argument out greatly. I think this because I can give the viewer a well presented visual of what happens when a teen plays a violent game. It is much better than writing it because the actions in the video speak the words written in the paper.

                                                                                               

                                                                                                            Sincerely,

                                                                                                            Dalton Schutjer

Problem-Solution Sources

William Petroski. "Four Clarinda inmates charged in gang-related prison killing." Des Moines Register 29   July 2010, Des Moines Register, ProQuest. Web. 2 Mar. 2011

Rood Lee.  "Iowa's black-white prisoner ratio is the highest in the nation. " Des Moines Register  18  Jul 2007,Des Moines Register, ProQuest. Web.  7 Mar. 2011

http://www.sentencingproject.org/doc/publications/cjprimer2009.pdf

http://www.doc.state.ia.us/DailyStats.asp Iowa Department of Corrections Website

http://www.uiowa.edu/~tlcp/TLCP%20Articles/18-3/whitney.finalfinal.me.mlb.100109.pdf

Whitney, Emily A. . "Correctional Rehabilitation Programs and the Adoption of International Standards: How the United States Can Reduce Recidivism and Promote the National Interest." The University of Iowa College of Law, 2009. Web. 10 Mar 2011. http://www.uiowa.edu/.

"The Federal Bureau of Prisons." About the Bureau of Prisons. The Federal Bureau of Prisons (“BOP”), August 2, 2009. Web. 10 Mar 2011. <http://www.bop.gov>.

Narrowing Your Topics

I think the activity in class was great. I had done a web design kind of like that before but instead of using topics it was catagories of topics to write about. I felt it brought the topics that you are thinking about writing into a mangaeable number of ideas and kept you focused on what the importance of what you are writing is. The big thing that it did for me is, that it took my big overall idea and broke them down into more focused and concentrated groups, because when i can choose what I want to write about my mind is a blur of ideas and thoughts so i hope this strategy will help, but if not, oh well. I still need some time to think about a topic for my paper because I still have way to many ideas in my head and they all see to be a bust because none of them are plausibly true or could come close to happening.

As a Result

I liked in the beginning how they talked about a student that couldn't put his words together and make sence to others, because i know how that feels. When the sentences in a paper or peice of writing, it makes the paper flow and complete and sounds like it should without confusion when the reader is reading it. I liked how they talked about the "do it yourself" principal on page 108, and gaves keys to, doing it yourself. 1) Using transitions, 2)Adding Postion words, 3)developing certain words and key terms when you write, and 4) repeating yourself with a difference. For the readers the be able to get what your saying and see your point of view in the overall peice, the transitions in the paper are typically in the beginning of a paragraph. And transitions tell the person reading if you are saying what you said before, adding something to it, generalizing it, giving an example and modifing the sentence or paragraph. Transition words are giving in a couple of catagories such as addition, example, elaboration, comparison, contrast, cause and effect and conclusion. I think that there being certain words for different partsof the papers and transitioning between those paragraphs is needed so that the author and writer can ge the best overall outcome of his or her paper and let the reader understand the peice fully.

Introduction to Video Game technology #2

The violence in video games today is just for the game, and put into the game for the affect of a real life situation or even imaginary situations as well, but just becasue it is in the game does it really mean that after having played the game, it will correspond to a real life situation? I dont not think this. I dont becasue after i played the game grand theft auto my heart rate never went down or even changed while playing the game. I was suttle and calm. I have never felt that after i steal a guys car and kill him that i will ever do that in real life or think about it, but just because after doing it in the game I wonder what that would be like in a real life situation. but its a game and not real life, you are in control of your life and a controller is not in charge of your body and what you do, your mind is.

Introduction to Video Game technology #1

After kids are gunned down at the University of Virginia Tech by a student, does the reasoning behind his actions point towards video games? or is it the content of the video games he was playing? Not all video games are violent and graphic, but many are and they are teaching/showing young kids and teenages many skills on how to do things that could be brought to real life very easily.