Portfolio

I think that my portfolio is overall pretty decent and complete although I need to do some organization of papers and drafts including our second paper. The first and third papers are the best ones I wrote and if I could only put those in the portfolio I would. I think that the revised papers are much better than the first ones I wrote because I go a chance to review them and make them much better. I also figured out different techniques on how to make the projects better from one to another because what I learned from the last one.
I will revise all the copies to the best I can and further the information, sources and strength of the paper to make it the best it can possibly be. I think having more than one revised peice is good to have because it shows that I actually took the time to look at the papers and review them to make them better. That is my plan to finalize my portfolio.

Letter to Visual

                                                                                                               Dalton Schutjer

                                                                                                               1500 Morton Ave

                                                                                                               Des Moines, IA 50316

                                                                                                               April 6, 2011

Dear Dr. Cottrill,

            Violence in video games is teaching young teens to act out. The video clearly shows that after playing a violent video game such as Call of Duty, a teen acts out in his rage after playing the game. It shows what can happen and what could happen when teens, young and old, play a violent video game and how their reaction to the game could affect them.

            Through the video I think the viewers can get a better understanding of how the affects of violent video games affect the player of the game. When writing about the violence the reader has to create their own picture and imagine what could happen. But, the video give the reader/watcher a picture and visual of what happens after playing the game. It provides them with the outcome they can see instead of having to imagine.

            I choose to play Call of Duty because it is a first-person shooter game and that was considered by ERSB (Entertainment Rating System) the most enticing game that teens are affected by and freak out at the end of the game because I got killed. I then went to the gas station and stole a car at gun point because of my anger after playing the game. The actions in the video are backing up my argument that violent video games are causing violent teens because of my reactions after playing the game.

            I think that by doing a visual essay and making my argument for everyone to see will help my argument out greatly. I think this because I can give the viewer a well presented visual of what happens when a teen plays a violent game. It is much better than writing it because the actions in the video speak the words written in the paper.

                                                                                               

                                                                                                            Sincerely,

                                                                                                            Dalton Schutjer

Problem-Solution Sources

William Petroski. "Four Clarinda inmates charged in gang-related prison killing." Des Moines Register 29   July 2010, Des Moines Register, ProQuest. Web. 2 Mar. 2011

Rood Lee.  "Iowa's black-white prisoner ratio is the highest in the nation. " Des Moines Register  18  Jul 2007,Des Moines Register, ProQuest. Web.  7 Mar. 2011

http://www.sentencingproject.org/doc/publications/cjprimer2009.pdf

http://www.doc.state.ia.us/DailyStats.asp Iowa Department of Corrections Website

http://www.uiowa.edu/~tlcp/TLCP%20Articles/18-3/whitney.finalfinal.me.mlb.100109.pdf

Whitney, Emily A. . "Correctional Rehabilitation Programs and the Adoption of International Standards: How the United States Can Reduce Recidivism and Promote the National Interest." The University of Iowa College of Law, 2009. Web. 10 Mar 2011. http://www.uiowa.edu/.

"The Federal Bureau of Prisons." About the Bureau of Prisons. The Federal Bureau of Prisons (“BOP”), August 2, 2009. Web. 10 Mar 2011. <http://www.bop.gov>.

Narrowing Your Topics

I think the activity in class was great. I had done a web design kind of like that before but instead of using topics it was catagories of topics to write about. I felt it brought the topics that you are thinking about writing into a mangaeable number of ideas and kept you focused on what the importance of what you are writing is. The big thing that it did for me is, that it took my big overall idea and broke them down into more focused and concentrated groups, because when i can choose what I want to write about my mind is a blur of ideas and thoughts so i hope this strategy will help, but if not, oh well. I still need some time to think about a topic for my paper because I still have way to many ideas in my head and they all see to be a bust because none of them are plausibly true or could come close to happening.

As a Result

I liked in the beginning how they talked about a student that couldn't put his words together and make sence to others, because i know how that feels. When the sentences in a paper or peice of writing, it makes the paper flow and complete and sounds like it should without confusion when the reader is reading it. I liked how they talked about the "do it yourself" principal on page 108, and gaves keys to, doing it yourself. 1) Using transitions, 2)Adding Postion words, 3)developing certain words and key terms when you write, and 4) repeating yourself with a difference. For the readers the be able to get what your saying and see your point of view in the overall peice, the transitions in the paper are typically in the beginning of a paragraph. And transitions tell the person reading if you are saying what you said before, adding something to it, generalizing it, giving an example and modifing the sentence or paragraph. Transition words are giving in a couple of catagories such as addition, example, elaboration, comparison, contrast, cause and effect and conclusion. I think that there being certain words for different partsof the papers and transitioning between those paragraphs is needed so that the author and writer can ge the best overall outcome of his or her paper and let the reader understand the peice fully.

Introduction to Video Game technology #2

The violence in video games today is just for the game, and put into the game for the affect of a real life situation or even imaginary situations as well, but just becasue it is in the game does it really mean that after having played the game, it will correspond to a real life situation? I dont not think this. I dont becasue after i played the game grand theft auto my heart rate never went down or even changed while playing the game. I was suttle and calm. I have never felt that after i steal a guys car and kill him that i will ever do that in real life or think about it, but just because after doing it in the game I wonder what that would be like in a real life situation. but its a game and not real life, you are in control of your life and a controller is not in charge of your body and what you do, your mind is.

Introduction to Video Game technology #1

After kids are gunned down at the University of Virginia Tech by a student, does the reasoning behind his actions point towards video games? or is it the content of the video games he was playing? Not all video games are violent and graphic, but many are and they are teaching/showing young kids and teenages many skills on how to do things that could be brought to real life very easily.

Topic

I am choosing the topic of violence in video games and how it corresponds to the minds and reactions of people in todays world who play video games. I will cover violent video games to educational video games as best i can to let people understand to my best knowledge of what i think about video game technology, and how it affects the minds of people who play them.

I Was a Teenage Illiterate

I think that Schine is an amazing example of a classic reader, not a reader to judge or think just reads to read. It seems like she had her ups and down a lot in reading and her expierences through reading made her more aware of what it was she was reading and how it all came together. The rhetoric, i believe wasn't picked up by her at first but later on in her reading expierence. If you can understand the rhetoric of reading you can read anything and everythiny, but if you dont understand the rhetoric of a reading will cannot fully take advantage of it. She gives her personal expierences from reading all types of text and how she feels it has influenced her and how it has made her the reader that she is today.
 I think that Schine, being "illiterate" or thinking that she is in a way, in the end made her greatly literate. She talked about how she tried reading something when she was a teen and not understanding it then but going back and reading it again when she was older greatly helped her understanding of the text she was reading. I feel that it grew on her and by reading more and more throughout her life that she grew a knowledge for rhetoric, and didnt fully understand it until she was literate, which was a big accomplishment for her. I think it is a great accomplishment to be able to understand what it is that you are reading because if you understand it, you will understand its purpose, who its intended for and its context inside the reading which is fully understanding RHETORIC!

Selecting A Topic

I caught up to technology about my sophmore year of high school, I didnt have a phone, i pod, or facebook until then and just got a computer of my own at the beginning of first semester. It never really bothered me but, most of my friends had a phone and an ipod, so i wanted one too. I never felt behind becasue of it, i just thought it would be cool to have the stuff they did. It was also nice not to have a phone because I didnt have my mom blowing my phone up, calling me and asking where i was when i didnt come home until 3 am when i was in middle school. having an ipod was a cool thing to have and it still is, but I used my first one alot and loved it, but then i realized i only used it when i was mowing the lawn, or getting ready to wrestle so more than half of a year it was never touched, and i still dont really use my ipod ever and i dont know why i even have it. I think we are influenced buy what the commercials, and the apprearance of the newest technologies, have and what can be seen. We dont really think about if we will really use them and will use it as much as we think we will. Like, when the ipad came out, I thought that it would be fun to have it and cool to play around on but then i thought, will this really do anything for me? i cant just pick this up and carryit with me while i go for a run or walk. Its to damn big and pointless, so there is where the ipod comes in and is a good thing to have but since i dont use either of them ever it doesnt really matter to me. I think that having the technology that we have is great, and we use to our advantage but could we go a day without it? I know i sure can. It gets old hearing everybody make drama and talk about whos facebook status is this and who said what to who on the phone, or in a text. I tired of hearing this shit that technology causes! i dont mind it every once and awhile, but hearing it everyday is tiring for my brain. I think that having the technology and being able to use it is great and i love it but not being up to par on everything is alright with me too, because if i dont get how to use it now, i can always learn from many people and if it is insignificant, i probably will never use it in my daily life.

College Writing

I think the main points that caught my eye were prewriting, writing and rewriting. Because before your write you have to think about what you already know about what it is your writing about, then you need to do research about your topic then you can start writing about the topic you have choosen. When you get writing about the topic you chose, you go into detail and the main points about what it is your writing about. Knowing the rhetoric I think is key when your writing because if you do not know the three main points about rhetoric, your writing will not make sense or feel complete. Context, purpose and audience are the three points of rhetoric. The context is whats in the paper and what will be talked about, such as your point of view, opinion, argument and so on. Purpose is the reason your are writing it for and the audience is who you are writing for. And if one of theses three doesnt fit the paper as a whole, it may not make sense to the reader or the people revising your paper.